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Saturday, August 19, 2017

Haiku and The Reveal: A device to create surprises in a narrative


https://writing.wikinut.com/img/2_5ze75h7mnu.o04/The-Reveal

The Reveal:
A device to create surprises in a narrative.

Reveal (narrative)
The reveal (also known as the big reveal) is a plot device in narrative structure, and is the exposure to the reader or audience of a previously hidden key element of plot… 

This may result in a plot twist, and could be the key plot turn or unexpected coda in the story – in the mystery genre, for example.


The reveal is a “dropped as if from the sky” information that changes our understanding of a story, from what's happened so far and what will happen over time. It’s where you have to rethink what you thought was the entire story. 

It is not as easy as it reads, because it’s not a cheap gimmicky surprise ending that we witness, occasionally, in various genres: It has to resonate and maintain a tension as the reader unfolds for themselves all the “what might happen scenarios.” 

Just as in haiku, haibun can work really well by having a reveal, or partial reveal, if we can get the reader to want to move forward and fill in all the negative space/white space. If that happens we’ve succeeded in bringing one of the defining moments of great storytelling in our haiku (and haibun).

Alan Summers Friday 5th May 2017



A reveal is simply a moment where some previously unknown piece of information is presented to the audience. The reveal is reserved for a big, central piece of info that changes our understanding of the entire story, even what's happened so far. In all cases, after this reveal, you have to rethink the entire story. —James H. Kelly (August 2010)


You use "reveal" to mean "big twist," whereas I've always thought of it as smaller epiphanies that occur throughout a narrative. What happens, though, is that the writers end up playing cat and mouse games with different types of viewers: those who are already anticipating what the reveal would be based on the clues given and those who are more innocent and more likely to be surprised by "obvious" twists. —Nate Stearns (January 2011)


Here are some "smaller epiphanies":





another hot day
a leaking water pipe stopped
by the jackdaw’s beak

Alan Summers
Honourable Mention, 14th Mainichi Haiku Contest (Japan 2010)  





wild peppermint
a dock leaf shadow
clings to the bee

Alan Summers
The Basho Museum Memorial Anthology (2001)




down the sidewalk
an old vagrant
daisies in his mouth

Alan Summers
Hobo (Tasmania, 1999)
Issa's Untidy Hut (2011)


strong wind
the juggler's elbow catches
a pocket hanky

Alan Summers
Publication credits: BBC - Cumbrian haiku (2004)
Anthology: BHS members anthology: Other (2004)
Article: The Moon is Broken: Juxtaposition in haiku article Scope vol. 60 no. 3 (Fellowship of Australian Writers, Queensland,  April 2014)




Valentine’s Day
my wife reads up
on Henry VIII

Alan Summers
Magazine/Journal credits: Blithe Spirit vol. 20 no. 3 (2010)
Anthology credit:  The Humours of Haiku ISBN 978-0-9565725-4-7 (Iron Press 2012):



the sticky label
over the christmas card
the new boyfriend’s name

Alan Summers
Anthology credits: 
Raku Teapot: Haiku (Raku Teapot Press/White Owl Publishing, California 2003)
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)



sunday lunch
the chatter of children
among hard drinkers

Alan Summers
Editor’s Choice, Haiku Harvest  vol. 4  no. 1 (2003)
Favourites each fortnight’ on Serge Tome’s tempslibre 2002
Anthology: Haiku Harvest: 2000 – 2006 (Modern English Tanka Press 2007)


crowded street
the space
a dog’s deposit

Alan Summers
Publication credits: Presence 7 (1998); UKMO™ Collection (2004)
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)


Sunday, July 23, 2017

Presence: A core part of haiku poetry – Article in progress for Writing Poetry: the haiku way by Alan Summers


Presence
A core part of haiku poetry

An article in progress for Writing Poetry: the haiku way 

“There is no good singing, there is only present and absent.” 
― Jeff Buckley

“The thing is that I also like to have lyrics that are inclusive, that give you space to be inside them, to put your experience on to them, so that they can move through other moments.”
― Jeff Buckley


From:
Presence and Absence in Modern Poetry
Hans, James S. (1980) 

"Presence and Absence in Modern Poetry," Criticism: Vol. 22: Iss. 4 , Article 2. 
Available at: http://digitalcommons.wayne.edu/criticism/vol22/iss4/2

‘Modern Poetry’… [is] “something” [that] has been called everything from a return to “reality” to an emphasis on self-reflexive poetry, but the reality these poets see is so various and the reflexivity of their poetry so different that another approach to their work seems necessary. 

"One could say that presence and absence ultimately come to be defined in terms of the relationship between language and reality, but for both TS Eliot and William Carlos Williams the problem was more profound than that."


Hans, James S. (1980) 
"Presence and Absence in Modern Poetry," Criticism: Vol. 22: Iss. 4 , Article 2. 
Available at: http://digitalcommons.wayne.edu/criticism/vol22/iss4/2



James S. Hans says that although he's not in total agreement that he is still indebted to the following works:
J. Hillis Miller, Poets of Reality (Cambridge: Belknap Press, 1965)
Joseph Riddel, The Inverted Bell (Baton Rouge: Louisiana State University Press 1974)



In "Of Modern Poetry" Wallace Stevens says

"It has to be living, to learn the speech of the place."
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Of_Modern_Poetry

In the Analyzing the poem section of Wikipedia, it says:

"the act of the mind is not past, present, or future. It is ongoing."
  
I feel that haiku have to do this, and in so doing it has its own presence (and absence) at the same time.



Presence definitions:

presence
ˈprɛz(ə)ns/
noun
noun: presence
The state or fact of existing, occurring, or being present.
attendance, attending, appearance, residence, occupancy
antonym: absence
A person or thing that exists or is present in a place but is not seen
synonyms:
ghost, spirit, spectre, phantom, vision, wraith, shadow, poltergeist, manifestation, apparition etc…

Ezra Pound’s Metro poem, considered to be an early hokku
or haiku includes the word apparition:


In a Station of the Metro

The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.

Ezra Pound
Lustra, 1916
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/In_a_Station_of_the_Metro




And William Carlos Williams brings the presence of a simple
red wheelbarrow and white chickens into "a precision of
presence":



so much depends
upon

a red wheel
barrow

glazed with rain
water

beside the white
chickens.


Williams, William Carlos
"XXII", Spring and All (New York: Contact Editions / Dijon: Maurice Darantière, 1923).
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Red_Wheelbarrow



Origin of the word presence:





Middle English: via Old French from Latin praesentia ‘being at hand’, from the verb praeesse (being present

French: présence d'esprit, Latin præsentia animi.



Definition of presence for English Language Learners: 
the fact of being in a particular place : the state of being present. The area that is close to someone: someone or something that is seen or noticed in a particular place, area, etc.


noun  ab·sence  \ˈab-sən(t)s\


Definition of absence


  1. 1:  a state or condition in which something expected, wanted, or looked for is not present or does not exist :  a state or condition in which something is absent an absence [=lack] of detail In the absence of reform [=without reform], progress will be slow.
  2. 2a :  a failure to be present at a usual or expected place :  the state of being absent https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/absence

    absence noun (NOT EXISTING)


“Haiku play in this way with presence and absence, and also with the present as “ever-now,” presence as an un-fleeting eternal. The very brief non-narrative poem lives and dies, brightens and fades in the way we attend through presence, in reading and contemplation. Such “edgy” aspects of context, background and backstory promise haiku romance.”
From the opening section called As fireflies from The Romance of Endings in Haiku by Professor Richard Gilbert

I would like to put forward that haiku operates as both a poem of presence as it does with an absence of something, and that the absence of that something is as vital as placing a presence of a something or somethings. 

In the final version of Writing Poetry: the haiku way there will be haiku by various poets. For now I will show examples of my own haiku, and as the main title is called Presence, these will be examples from the highly regarded haikai magazine Presence: haikupresence.org/home 



http://haikupresence.org/subscribe



hot sandwiches
the railing spikes collect
children's gloves

Of course we don’t need to see the actual children who have dropped a glove or two over time, but think of all the children who have, as they are lost in the moment perhaps. Then of course we could also remember news stories of displaced children due to war and famine.

On another serious note:

   In the UK, a child is reported missing every 3 minutes

http://www.missingkids.co.uk

We cannot imagine what the effect is on a parent and a sibling when a child is unexpectedly 'absent' perhaps for ever.



down side streets -
gulls turning the sky
in and out

A biographical haiku again (experiential). The sky is not really visible to the naked eye, nor do birds really ‘turn’ the sky, but themselves. There are absences that form major parts of a presence, such as 'sky', the air that we breathe, the moon that effects our large and small bodies of water, and other liquids such as our own human bodies. We are constantly 'turning' in one form or another.



the grimace
of the roadside cat
its last

You could say this is almost like Alice when she is only seeing the Cheshire cat’s grin. Cats are often famous for their fastidiousness. This could be seen as the last act of fastidiousness.

   
The Cheshire Cat is a fictional cat popularised by Lewis Carroll in Alice's Adventures in Wonderland where one of its distinguishing features is that from time to time its body disappears, the last thing visible being its iconic grin: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cheshire_Cat 



crowded street
the space
a dog’s deposit

I was amazed that people on a very busy and bustling street crossing were unaware or disregardful of people’s personal space, yet somehow the “low on the ground” dog faeces was somehow visible amongst hundreds of feet, and respected in its way, moreso than our fellow humans. 



train whistle
a blackbird hops
along its notes

Do we see the train? Do we need to see the train?  Does the bird need to "see" the train for what it is in order to sing? Singing is a form of vibrating and reacting to other vibrations. We don't often 'see' vibrations, but they are not really absent.



deep into winter 
the sun measured 
in kettle clicks 

Perhaps we don’t need to see the kettle, and perhaps the kitchen itself where someone is alone and regularly makes hot beverages by boiling water. Its absence except for the sound of being clicked on, and later automatically clicked off is perhaps enough, and a symbol of the passage of time. The click of a kettle both on and off is unconsciously soothing for something we know, or no longer recognise, as absent. Yet that iabsentia is a tangible presence.



my father's war 
a story of the dark 
collecting its own

My father did not suffer the horrors of war as much as his brothers and fellow participants within the arena of World War Two. He mostly told of the great experiences of Africa and India, but once, only once, did he tell me the horrible experience of picking up some blown up body parts of fellow soldiers for identification purposes in the deepest night, with no light allowed, after strafing by enemy aircraft.



the buddleia
and the butterfly...
vanishing stars

It’s always a wonder to see the multitude of stars during the dark hours of the night and very early morning, only to witness them disappear. Of course they are always there.

The other side of the mirror is often not seen but its presence is very much there via the front facing actions of the reflective surface we see. There is not always a need to see the smoke to 'see' the mirror.

Childhood is absent in us as we grow as adults, isn't it? It's absent from our lives as adults. But can we truly operate as adults if we make our 'once-childhood' really absent in our lives?


dry stone wall
Paddington Bear
out in the rain

Do we see ‘Paddington Bear’? Do we just think of him at Paddington Train Station arriving from Peru all alone and initially friendless? Is Paddington Bear, the fictional creation of Michael Bond, a symbol of loneliness, or of adventure? Is this the first great adventure of a child finding their independence? I can let the reader decide.

Paddington Bear:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paddington_Bear

Photos by myself yesterday at London's Paddington train station.



Michael Bond (13 January 1926 – 27 June 2017)






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Call of the Page
(Alan Summers & Karen Hoy)



Sunday, July 02, 2017

The Cattails journal of The United Haiku and Tanka Society is open for submissions!



Submissions for Autumn/ October 2017 issue open:

1st July (midnight) GMT 
and closes 15th August (midnight) GMT

See details for haiku; tanka; senryu; and haibun
http://www.cattailsjournal.com/submissions.html

We look forward to even more submissions for this ever popular publication!

warm regards, 

Alan Summers
President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
http://www.unitedhaikuandtankasociety.com/biographies.html

Sunday, June 11, 2017

Stopping for ducks and a week of haiku by Alan Summers, June 11 through the 17th 2017



Alan often stops for ducks, this time at Kew Gardens, London


Feature: A week of haiku by Alan Summers, June 11 through the 17th.

Enjoy visiting each day, and do click like if you do like, and even leave a comment! :-)





These haiku will eventually be showcased again on Area 17, and at our Call of the Page blog:




Also, here are a few other new haiku in various print and online magazines:





the bee hotel
             there are
  no vacancies


Alan Summers

Publication credit:  Blithe Spirit Vol. 27 No. 2 May 2017





taking a lunch break...
the common blue damselflies
gliding into packs


Alan Summers

Publication credit:  Hedgerow #113 (May 2017)


Common Blue Damselflies





basketball sessions
Azure Damselflies shift
the day’s heat around

Alan Summers

Publication credit:  Hedgerow #114 2nd June 2017

Azure Damselflies

On-line Guide to the Dragonflies and Damselflies of Britain and Ireland






solstice heat 
the moon quicker 
in a taxi


Alan Summers
Invited writer for the anthology of the Samobor Haiku Meeting, Samobor 2017, Croatia





mountain clouds
the birth of the moon
out of a river bed


Alan Summers
World haiku poetry day Ensamble  (April 2017)
Cha No Keburi (Smoke Tea) publication







candlemas
little fingers pulling
the wishbone


Alan Summers

Publication credit:  Brass Bell Edible Haiku (April 2017)
Anthology credit: EarthRise Rolling Haiku Collaboration 2017 The theme of Reconciliation

Candlemas
“birds… indicate the way of the poor.”

The tradition behind pulling a wishbone:







fading photos
a goldfinch tugs again
at the spiderweb


Alan Summers

Publication credit:  Blithe Spirit Vol. 27 No. 2 May 2017






zigzagging
the meadow buttercups
into a robin’s song


Alan Summers

Publication credit:  Blithe Spirit Vol. 27 No. 2 May 2017





those who stop —
ducks taking colour
from the river


Alan Summers

Publication credit:  brass bell: a haiku journal curated by Zee Zahava (January 2017)
An actual observation but also inspired by Ducks written by F.W. Harvey (1919)






Berlin afternoon
the rain in your hair
passing time


Alan Summers

Award Credit: wonderfold haibun winner (January 2017)

Republished: 
Narrow Road 
Literary Magazine for Flash Fiction – Poetry - Haibun
Special invitation only inaugural issue first (April 2017)



Alan Summers is the President of the United Haiku and Tanka Society, and the co-founder of Call of the Page: www.callofthepage.org


Call of the Page regularly runs popular online courses on haiku and related genres such as haibun; tanka; senryu; shahai; tanka stories etc...

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