1st Prize
Fellowship of Australian Writers, Queensland 1995 Haiku Competition
dusk at the golf club
part of a marker pole
a tawny frogmouth
Alan Summers
Judge’s Report
This poem fulfils the criteria for a haiku in a number of ways. Haiku should be the result of an insightful moment when something links a human to nature.
The human element in this poem is strong, ‘dusk at the golf club’ : the writer is going inside. The day has ended. The tawny frogmouth is coming out; his night of searching for food is just beginning.
The centre line acts as a pivot for the first and third lines: the coming and going of two creatures who share the same territory.
The marker pole is important to both. It is the link between them. It guides the human and the frogmouth uses it as a perch from which to watch for prey
The human will probably go into the club house and prop on a stool to eat and drink. Is their behavior so different?
This haiku performs in the way in which a well-crafted haiku should – by leading the reader’s mind far beyond the words on the page.
Judge commentary by Janice Bostok
Janice Bostok:
Janice is an internationally respected haiku writer and editor.
Hiroaki Sato's "Haiku and the Agonies of Translation" published in a Frogpond XXII supplement of theory and analysis in 1999, included 30 of Janice's haiku.
Hiroaki Sato also translated haiku of ozaki hosai in the book called: "Right Under the Big Sky, I Don't Wear a Hat" (Rock Spring Collection of Japanese Literature) [Paperback]
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| Photo:C.Coverdale Subject:Tawny Frogmouth Location: Sydney,Australia (photo taken in backyard)https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Tawny_Frogmouth_(Coverdale).jpg |
Tawny Frogmouth:
http://australianmuseum.net.au/Tawny-Frogmouth
https://www.sciencedirect.com/topics/agricultural-and-biological-sciences/nightjar
Janice M. Bostok
9th April 1942—4th September 2011
In Memoriam - Alan Summers
http://www.hsa-haiku.org/newsletters/2011-10-HSA-Newsletter.pdf
Tributes to Janice:
Janice became a very good friend in later years and we met in person for the first time at Katikati, North Island, New Zealand at the official opening of the Haiku Pathway:
Introducing our Tawny Frogmouth: http://www.tangleoflife.org/animals/tawny-frogmouth-podargus-strigoides
Frogmouths and Nightjars:https://www.sciencedirect.com/topics/agricultural-and-biological-sciences/nightjar
On a very sad Note:
Regrettably Janice has passed away:
Regrettably Janice has passed away:
Janice M. Bostok
9th April 1942—4th September 2011
In Memoriam - Alan Summers
http://www.hsa-haiku.org/newsletters/2011-10-HSA-Newsletter.pdf
Amongst the Graffiti -
Collected Haiku & Senryu
1972-2002 - Janice Bostok
Amongst the Graffiti is available as a PDF:
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